SCRIPT REVIEW    ‘LAST STOP TOKYO’

Hello Nancee, Melbourne Live Indie Film Fest has added a note to your submission:

As a seasoned screenwriter, Nancee LaFayette displays a strong command of storytelling, character development, and pacing. The screenplay’s coherence and attention to detail showcase the writer’s ability to craft a polished and professional narrative.

The premise of obsession leading to a bloody trail sets the stage for a high-stakes and suspenseful story. As the narrative unfolds across 124 pages, the screenplay keeps the audience engaged with its well-paced plot and intriguing characters.

The blend of action sequences and dramatic moments adds depth and excitement to the story, making it a riveting and emotionally charged experience. The screenplay’s ability to weave together different genres seamlessly showcases the writer’s skill in crafting a multifaceted and immersive narrative.

The Las Vegas to Tokyo setting adds an exotic and dynamic backdrop to the events, enhancing the overall atmosphere of the screenplay. The locales and cultures explored in the screenplay add richness and diversity to the story, making it an exciting and visually appealing cinematic experience.

The exploration of obsession as a driving force in the plot delves into the complexities of human emotions, adding layers of intrigue and psychological depth to the characters’ motivations.

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International Screenwriters’ Association

TITLE: Meeting Director Sam Peckinpah GENRE: Drama WRITER: Nancee LaFayette

OVERALL:    With some good characterization, a very interesting premise, and a plot that promises attraction and emotional entanglement between Sam Peckinpah and a woman that crosses his path, the script for MEETING DIRECTOR SAM PECKINPAH brings us an intriguing tale.

This is an ambitious, intricate, and vibrant drama. It offers a palpably exciting vibe, tense exchanges, and evocative imagery. There’s an engaging plot at work here, one that’s led by an intriguing protagonist and wonderful conversational interplay that reads well.

Set against the backdrop of the filming of the movie, Ballad of Cable Hogue, and featuring one of Hollywood’s most maverick, and controversial, directors, Sam Peckinpah, and his attraction to a girl working on the set, this script screams out with allure and interest. Known for his troublesome antics and stubborn perspectives, having Sam involved immediately draws attention to the script. We are intrigued to read about his enchantment with this girl, Nancee, who is working there on set and curious to know how it all came about.

Sam is at the end of his tether, with the shooting of his film involving issues with the weather, actors, and the production staff. The production is going to hell, and although Sam is no shrinking violet, even his penchant for chaos doesn’t take precedence over his desire to shoot the movie and free himself and everyone involved from the project.

Through the chaotic events of trying to film the movie, Sam meets Nancee, an internally troubled yet outwardly stalwart young woman who shakes his life up the most. Aware of his bullish personality and tough treatment of others, Nancee meets him head-on. Her bold approach succeeds in keeping his beastly personality from hurting her.

However, to her surprise and his, Sam develops an attraction for Nancee. At first, the two have no idea how to react to one another. This leads to some really funny moments including conversations about films and humanity, all of which constitute a pseudo-first date. The writer has given Sam and Nancee a nice amount of chemistry that sees them grow close through bantering with each other. The dialogue flows naturally between them, and it’s nice reading about their interactions.

This is a warm story, which makes it a rare one too, as most accounts of Sam give reference to only his harshness as a person. The writer’s choice to show a side of Sam that many didn’t even knew existed is a wise and inspired decision.

Hello Nancee, Best International Motion Pictures has added a note to your submission: Meeting Director Sam Peckinpah

The opening scene at the Apachieland saloon immediately drew me into the world you describe, setting the stage for the intriguing encounter with Frank Kawaloski and the legendary director, Sam Peckinpah. Your narration is particularly effective in conveying the atmosphere and tension in the saloon, creating a memorable introduction to the characters.

The evolving dynamic between the protagonist and Sam Peckinpah unfolds with a mix of humor, emotion, and tension. Your depiction of the protagonist’s internal struggle, grappling with unexpected emotions for the director, adds depth to the narrative.

The scene on the set, where Sam Peckinpah directs the protagonist to walk by with a cowboy, showcases the intersection of personal and professional challenges. The emotional intensity and Sam’s demand for authenticity in the performance create a beautiful moment that lingers with the reader.

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